translation. Moon Troupe 'Edward VIII'

 

After two months of translation (not counting two weeks of my business trips and holidays), I finally finished my second project of Takarazuka performances translation. Unexpectedly 'Edward' turned out to be more difficult to translate than 'Alice's lover'. Somewhere in the middle I knew that there exists an already translated version, but I didn't care. It was kinda important for me to do it myself. Still, there are a couple of phrases I couldn't understand very well. I apologise for not being able to translate them 100% correctly, but overall this translation must be rather good. I've done as much research as I could. Occasional mistakes and misspells possible.

So, please, have a look.

translation

script
upd. 29.03.17
Было бы странно, если бы я сделала перевод только на английский и не сделала на свой родной язык, да? Подумала я и стала делать перевод на русский. Как и ожидалось, он шел туго, так как мюзикл про Англию с отсылками к ее истории и заимствованиями из английского языка явно будет переводиться лучше на английский. Как не ожидалось, я в процессе нашла еще и ошибки в скрипте. А потом еще месяц протупила и так и не выложила ссылки. Теперь этой глупейшей неопределенности будет поменьше. Так что вот.

Takarazuka Moon Troupe 'Alice's Lover' script and translation

Some things you would like to know before you read it

1. This is a script, not a subtitle file.

2. The script contains a few places where I wasn't able to understand what the characters were saying. This may or may not affect the final translation, because some phrases can be understood judging by the context and some cannot. The words that were difficult to hear are marked as 「聞きにくい」 in the Japanese script and [incomprehensible] in the English one. The words I am not sure of are written in italics

3. The songs lyrics are written down by me and verified with the help of 'Alice's Lover' Twitter bot here. This does not mean that after verification all the lyrics become identical to what the bot posts.

4. You may agree or disagree with my variant of translation, I kinda don't care. But if you have a better version of translation and would like to kindly explain me why, I'd be glad to correct my mistakes. The same goes for any mistypes etc.

5. I think I can share the final result of my 2-year work. Final not because it's polished to perfection but rather because I'm fed up with it and want to start translating the next one, which would be 'Rurouni Kenshin' I think.

Link to the script

Link to the translation